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जबरदस्त.....कमाल.....अद्भुत क्या लेखनी है यार तुम्हारी...अविश्वसनीय।

तुम्हारा लेखन मुझे अपने एक मित्र और बहुत ही उम्दा लेखक की याद दिलाता है! ऐसे ही एक और है!

शुरूआत से अब तक कहानी का फ्लो ऐसा है कि मैं एक भी जगह बोर ना हुआ। आजकल ऐसे बहुत कम लेखक और कहानी बची है जिससे मैं बोर नहीं होता। भाई तुमने सच में कमाल कर दिया।



आजकल सब उन्मुक्त गगन में विचरण करना चाहते हैं ऐसे में ये पाबंदी....बागी बना देती है।

मुझे लगता है कि यह एक बहुत बड़ी बगावत का संदेश देती नज़र आ रही है।



कितनी प्यारी हैं ये भाभी सा ........मैं भी राजस्थान से हूं तो समझ सकता हूँ कि ऐसा बहुत ही कम होता होगा।




जैसा कि मेरा अंदाजा था....ये जवाँ दिल बड़ा बागी होता है वैसा ही कुछ यहाँ देखने को मिला आजकल ऐसे बहुत कम लेखक हैं जो समाज की कुरीतियों को अपनी लेखनी में उतार देते हैं........माना कि यहाँ ये सब नहीं चलता फिर भी एक सीमा में कोई संदेश दिया जाये तो क्या बुराई है।।।।।। देहातों में आज भी ऐसा होता।


तुम्हारी कहानी में जो seduction है वो वाकई काबिल-ए-तारिफ है।।। ऐसा seduction कहानियों से जैसे लुप्त सा हो गया है... बस intro हुआ और अगले में सेक्स हुआ और काम खत्म। ईसे ऐसे ही बरकरार रखाे मित्र।

तुम्हारी लेखनी अतिउत्तम है। कहना तो बहुत कुछ चाहता हूँ.. बस समझ नहीं आ रहा कि क्या कहूँ। अगली बार कह दूंगा।

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wah bahi kya likha hai......Dil main aag ho toh baap se be takar le sakta hai aadami......wakai bahut accha likha...ab dekte hain unth kis karwat baith tha hai
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Halfbludprince story suru hi ki aj pdna ..aur ek pal ke liye bhi bore na hua mai....kamal sandar...sabse bdi bat hai jo last update me hai...vo hai zamidari vyvastha....ab aage dekhna hoga ..ki kya hoga....shandar aur adbhut rachana

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kya lekhani hai bhai maja aa gaya..
bas aise hi likhate rahiye....

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bahut achhe dost jaisa aap likh rahe ho waisa aur Koi bhi nahi likh sakta abhi jo bhi is story me ho raha hai wo sab padh kar aisa lag raha hai ki kash ye sab hamare sath bhi hua hota (sirf pitai chhod kar) lekin bhai ek request hai ki ye story adhuri nahi chhodna ise puri jarur Karna bhale hi sex mat dikhana hame chalega......
Thanks
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क्या लेखनी है यार... बस मजा आ जाता है और ताजा हो जाती है वो यादें... जब जवानी बस चढ़ना ही शुरू हुई थी कि हम किसी मोहल्ले.. किसी के घर के चक्कर काटना शुरू कर दिये थे। वेसे तो अभी भी 20 का हूँ पर अपने गाँव से काफी दूर हूँ और कच्ची उम्र की उस मस्ती को बहुत मिस करता हूँ!

तुम्हारी लेखनी से बस वहां की यादें ताजा हो जाती है। मेरे भाई। सच में कमाल कर देते हो हर एक कथानक के साथ।

यादों के भंवर से निकल कर कहानी पर आये तो राणा जी खुद भी दर्द में है कुंदन की ऐसी हालत देखकर.... हर बाप ऐसा ही होता है बस वो दिखाता नहीं है लेकिन अपने बेटे/औलाद से बेशुमार प्यार करता है। मेरा भी ऐसा ही है.... बेस्ट इन द वर्ल्ड।

तुम्हारी लेखनी सच में अतुलनीय है मित्र... पढ़कर बस कहीं खो से जाते हैं।

आयत कहीं वो छज्जे वाली तो नहीं।

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क्या मस्त वर्णन किया है आपने, लड़की का अदा से कान पकड़ कर सॉरी बोलना और लड़के का गुस्सा एक पल में गायब हो जाना, मज़ा आ गया पढ़ कर ...

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जबरदस्त कथानक..... चंदा चाची का seduction इसमें
भी बरकरार है......गज़ब।।।।लगता है सबसे पहले उसी का नंबर लगेगा।

फिर अपनी भाभी सा तो है हीं .... कितनी प्यारी हैं यार बस दिल ले जाती हैं। हर फौजी की पत्नी उसको ऐसे ही याद करती है उनको मेरा नमन जो सिर्फ और सिर्फ हमारी रक्षा के लिए अपने परिवार अपने प्रियजनों से दूर रहते हैं।


आयत का क्या चक्कर है वेसे नाम है बडा प्यारा।

क्या काला है राणा सा कि दाल में।
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Saare updates padh liye.... mast story hai... kya khoob likha hai bhai... gajab likhte ho yaar.... maza aa gaya padh kar.... writing

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Last ke kuch update nhi pd paya tha....wapas aaya to kafi badlaw the.....rat ko rasta bhatak gya .....aur ek chudail si lagne vali ladki ne bahaya......subah vo bhi nhi dikhi.....kya sach me vo ladki hi thi dekhna jaruri rhega.......ab to chachi ke sath mje hai launde ke...... bhabhi ke sath kuch seduction ka itejar hi........ayat....nice name .....overall..ek jabardast story,,.,knhi se bhi pakad nhi kamjor ho rhi
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बहुत खूब....

बरसो से ऐसी ही सधी और शानदार कहानी पढ़ने की इच्छा थी

बस भाई इस सिलसिले को बनाये रखना

शानदार लिखा है
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achaa hua jo bhabhi ne bada dil dikhate hue maaf kar diya...puja se koi purana yarana lagta hai....
are bhai 5 baje aayat se milne jana tha kya hua? khet ke chakkar main bhul gaya kundan...chalo koi na .bhabhi se guftgu kar lo...

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o teri. ye chachi to apni fantasy puri kar rahi hai..lagta hai chachi nai neeli film kafi dekhi hai...chalo badhiya hua jo chachi ka pel diya...
ab uth jaagh kisan...bhor hui maati pukare ...ab karm kar kundan...fal jarur milega...khoon mai tere mitti ,mitti mai tera khoon
Long live FTK
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Shaandar kahani hai bhai.... shabdon mein bayan nahi kar sakta...
Kahani jaise jaise aage badh rahi hai bahut se raaz samne aa rahe hain...
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Dhamakedar updates bro awesome marvellous description wah maaza ayega bhai
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STAR RATED for this wonderful story
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jabardast updates bhai.....
phr ek naya twist la diya aapne story me maja aa gaya....
kanhi pooja aur kundan pyaar to nhi karne lagenge...
ab dekhtein hain kaun jeetata hai angaar ya kundan....
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Masterpiece.....
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सच मे सेक्स रोमांच सब कुछ है आपकी कथा मे
आपकी लेखनी को सलाम
कृपया ईसी प्रकार गति बनाये रखे
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Bahut Dino baad koi ek dhang ki kahani padhne ko mili. Isme plot aur Bhasha dono hi bahut achhe hain. Isi tarah Achhi tarah likhte rehna
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Update-30 Aj pahli bar ..pita ka prem dikha....marvellos fauji bhai.....great
really this is a masterpiece
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Bhai mai xossip par naya hu, aapki sabhi story lajawaab h. Sbi dil ko choo jaati hai, aisa lagta hai ye sab kuch saamne hi ho raha hai. Or aapki dark side saga ke liye to mere pass words hi nhi hai. Bhai aise hi likhte rho or hme entertain karte rho..
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आज तक ऐसी कहानी नहीं पढ़ी चेतन भगत वगैरह कुछ नहीं हैं तुम्हारे सामने
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One of the best story of xossip
best running story
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भाई बहुत खूब

Erotic सिर्फ sex का वर्णन करना नही है, सिचुएशन और कैरेक्टर devlop होना चाहिए और सबसे बड़ी बात की कहानी में flow होना चाहिये, जो इस कहानी में है

ये कहानी अगर इसी तरह चलती रही तो जल्द ही xossip की चुनिंदा कहानियो में इसका शुमार होगा

ये कहानी sex story नही काम साहित्य है।

लगे रहो भाई
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Bhai shandaar update.. Or kya likhu aapki tarif mein... Kya conversation likha hai bhai.. Aisa narration to film ka script writer b nhi likh skta.. Really lajawaab...
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Bhai kisi movie ke liye story likh ke dekho cha jaoge bhai.. I am serious bro..
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nice update
is site pr mera 2 comment h ye..apki sbhi story padhi h Mene sbhi ek se badkar ek h..pr apki ending sad rhti h jo mjhe khud 5,6 din tk sad rkhti h to is br thodi kripa karna bhai..
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Sabse bdi bat hoti hai story me flow.....kisi bhi angle se knhi se bhi...ye kahani kamjor nhi pd rhi hai.....har drishya ko bakhoobi darshaya hai.....mai tareef bhi kitni karu.....is kahani se lagta hai,..ki ap bhi....ek kamal ke lekhak ho
ishq hi to sabkuch hota hai....usi ka nateeja tha jo Kundan ne ...angaar ka kam tamam kar diya....
fauji bhai ek req hai,..ki is kahni ke khatm hone tak Ban mat hona...
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दिल करता है हाथ चूम लू इस कहानी को लिखने वाले के......
Superb update dear
Post more as soon as
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for the story...mai har bar yhi bolta hu....this is a masterpiece
har character ka....narration...situation ke hisab se kiya hai....na koi bhaga daudi na hi kisi bhi scene me jaldbaji.......kahani ke har sacene me ek thahrav hai aur har thahrav me ...ka apna alag mja hai....
Kundan...do nav par savari karega...ye to tay lag rha hai....par dil ka rishta to ek ke sath hi judega......Aur rhi bat Bhabhi ke sath uske to kahne hi ky...keep it on Halfbludprince:repps: with

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Really a masterpiece
excellent writing
first time xossip pe koi story aisi mili Jo bar bar log in karne pe majboor kr deti hai
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Ye story ek dum really story hai ...isko padhte hue usi jagah par pahunch jaate hai jiska varnan chal raha hota hai ... Bahut hee badhiya likhte ho ....

Awesome ...

Waiting for update...

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