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पाठको के विचार


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Originally Posted by aaryansanky View Post
जबरदस्त.....कमाल.....अद्भुत क्या लेखनी है यार तुम्हारी...अविश्वसनीय।

तुम्हारा लेखन मुझे अपने एक मित्र और बहुत ही उम्दा लेखक की याद दिलाता है ऐसे ही एक और है!

शुरूआत से अब तक कहानी का फ्लो ऐसा है कि मैं एक भी जगह बोर ना हुआ। आजकल ऐसे बहुत कम लेखक और कहानी बची है जिससे मैं बोर नहीं होता। भाई तुमने सच में कमाल कर दिया।



आजकल सब उन्मुक्त गगन में विचरण करना चाहते हैं ऐसे में ये पाबंदी....बागी बना देती है।

मुझे लगता है कि यह एक बहुत बड़ी बगावत का संदेश देती नज़र आ रही है।



कितनी प्यारी हैं ये भाभी सा ........मैं भी राजस्थान से हूं तो समझ सकता हूँ कि ऐसा बहुत ही कम होता होगा।




जैसा कि मेरा अंदाजा था....ये जवाँ दिल बड़ा बागी होता है वैसा ही कुछ यहाँ देखने को मिला आजकल ऐसे बहुत कम लेखक हैं जो समाज की कुरीतियों को अपनी लेखनी में उतार देते हैं........माना कि यहाँ ये सब नहीं चलता फिर भी एक सीमा में कोई संदेश दिया जाये तो क्या बुराई है।।।।।। देहातों में आज भी ऐसा होता।


तुम्हारी कहानी में जो seduction है वो वाकई काबिल-ए-तारिफ है।।। ऐसा seduction कहानियों से जैसे लुप्त सा हो गया है... बस intro हुआ और अगले में सेक्स हुआ और काम खत्म। ईसे ऐसे ही बरकरार रखाे मित्र।

तुम्हारी लेखनी अतिउत्तम है। कहना तो बहुत कुछ चाहता हूँ.. बस समझ नहीं आ रहा कि क्या कहूँ। अगली बार कह दूंगा।

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wah bahi kya likha hai......Dil main aag ho toh baap se be takar le sakta hai aadami......wakai bahut accha likha...ab dekte hain unth kis karwat baith tha hai
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Originally Posted by Royal Lover View Post
Halfbludprince story suru hi ki aj pdna ..aur ek pal ke liye bhi bore na hua mai....kamal sandar...sabse bdi bat hai jo last update me hai...vo hai zamidari vyvastha....ab aage dekhna hoga ..ki kya hoga....shandar aur adbhut rachana

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Originally Posted by vk663283 View Post
kya lekhani hai bhai maja aa gaya..
bas aise hi likhate rahiye....

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Originally Posted by S.RAGHU View Post
bahut achhe dost jaisa aap likh rahe ho waisa aur Koi bhi nahi likh sakta abhi jo bhi is story me ho raha hai wo sab padh kar aisa lag raha hai ki kash ye sab hamare sath bhi hua hota (sirf pitai chhod kar) lekin bhai ek request hai ki ye story adhuri nahi chhodna ise puri jarur Karna bhale hi sex mat dikhana hame chalega......
Thanks
Waiting for next update

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Originally Posted by aaryansanky View Post
क्या लेखनी है यार... बस मजा आ जाता है और ताजा हो जाती है वो यादें... जब जवानी बस चढ़ना ही शुरू हुई थी कि हम किसी मोहल्ले.. किसी के घर के चक्कर काटना शुरू कर दिये थे। वेसे तो अभी भी 20 का हूँ पर अपने गाँव से काफी दूर हूँ और कच्ची उम्र की उस मस्ती को बहुत मिस करता हूँ!

तुम्हारी लेखनी से बस वहां की यादें ताजा हो जाती है। मेरे भाई। सच में कमाल कर देते हो हर एक कथानक के साथ।

यादों के भंवर से निकल कर कहानी पर आये तो राणा जी खुद भी दर्द में है कुंदन की ऐसी हालत देखकर.... हर बाप ऐसा ही होता है बस वो दिखाता नहीं है लेकिन अपने बेटे/औलाद से बेशुमार प्यार करता है। मेरा भी ऐसा ही है.... बेस्ट इन द वर्ल्ड।

तुम्हारी लेखनी सच में अतुलनीय है मित्र... पढ़कर बस कहीं खो से जाते हैं।

आयत कहीं वो छज्जे वाली तो नहीं।

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क्या मस्त वर्णन किया है आपने, लड़की का अदा से कान पकड़ कर सॉरी बोलना और लड़के का गुस्सा एक पल में गायब हो जाना, मज़ा आ गया पढ़ कर ...

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Originally Posted by aaryansanky View Post
जबरदस्त कथानक..... चंदा चाची का seduction इसमें
भी बरकरार है......गज़ब।।।।लगता है सबसे पहले उसी का नंबर लगेगा।

फिर अपनी भाभी सा तो है हीं .... कितनी प्यारी हैं यार बस दिल ले जाती हैं। हर फौजी की पत्नी उसको ऐसे ही याद करती है उनको मेरा नमन जो सिर्फ और सिर्फ हमारी रक्षा के लिए अपने परिवार अपने प्रियजनों से दूर रहते हैं।


आयत का क्या चक्कर है वेसे नाम है बडा प्यारा।

क्या काला है राणा सा कि दाल में।
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Originally Posted by Deadheart786 View Post
Saare updates padh liye.... mast story hai... kya khoob likha hai bhai... gajab likhte ho yaar.... maza aa gaya padh kar.... writing

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Originally Posted by Royal Lover View Post
Last ke kuch update nhi pd paya tha....wapas aaya to kafi badlaw the.....rat ko rasta bhatak gya .....aur ek chudail si lagne vali ladki ne bahaya......subah vo bhi nhi dikhi.....kya sach me vo ladki hi thi dekhna jaruri rhega.......ab to chachi ke sath mje hai launde ke...... bhabhi ke sath kuch seduction ka itejar hi........ayat....nice name .....overall..ek jabardast story,,.,knhi se bhi pakad nhi kamjor ho rhi
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Originally Posted by frend2001 View Post
बहुत खूब....

बरसो से ऐसी ही सधी और शानदार कहानी पढ़ने की इच्छा थी

बस भाई इस सिलसिले को बनाये रखना

शानदार लिखा है
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Originally Posted by localmusafir View Post
achaa hua jo bhabhi ne bada dil dikhate hue maaf kar diya...puja se koi purana yarana lagta hai....
are bhai 5 baje aayat se milne jana tha kya hua? khet ke chakkar main bhul gaya kundan...chalo koi na .bhabhi se guftgu kar lo...

FTK
revolutionary of xossip
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Originally Posted by localmusafir View Post
o teri. ye chachi to apni fantasy puri kar rahi hai..lagta hai chachi nai neeli film kafi dekhi hai...chalo badhiya hua jo chachi ka pel diya...
ab uth jaagh kisan...bhor hui maati pukare ...ab karm kar kundan...fal jarur milega...khoon mai tere mitti ,mitti mai tera khoon
Long live FTK
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Originally Posted by kuldeep2595 View Post
Shaandar kahani hai bhai.... shabdon mein bayan nahi kar sakta...
Kahani jaise jaise aage badh rahi hai bahut se raaz samne aa rahe hain...
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Originally Posted by game888 View Post
Dhamakedar updates bro awesome marvellous description wah maaza ayega bhai
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Originally Posted by game888 View Post
STAR RATED for this wonderful story
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Originally Posted by vk663283 View Post
jabardast updates bhai.....
phr ek naya twist la diya aapne story me maja aa gaya....
kanhi pooja aur kundan pyaar to nhi karne lagenge...
ab dekhtein hain kaun jeetata hai angaar ya kundan....
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Originally Posted by Royal Lover View Post
Masterpiece.....
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Originally Posted by lawat View Post
सच मे सेक्स रोमांच सब कुछ है आपकी कथा मे
आपकी लेखनी को सलाम
कृपया ईसी प्रकार गति बनाये रखे
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Originally Posted by Chachajaani2 View Post
Bahut Dino baad koi ek dhang ki kahani padhne ko mili. Isme plot aur Bhasha dono hi bahut achhe hain. Isi tarah Achhi tarah likhte rehna
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Originally Posted by Royal Lover View Post
Update-30 Aj pahli bar ..pita ka prem dikha....marvellos fauji bhai.....great
really this is a masterpiece
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Originally Posted by Jiddiboy 1987 View Post
Bhai mai xossip par naya hu, aapki sabhi story lajawaab h. Sbi dil ko choo jaati hai, aisa lagta hai ye sab kuch saamne hi ho raha hai. Or aapki dark side saga ke liye to mere pass words hi nhi hai. Bhai aise hi likhte rho or hme entertain karte rho..
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Originally Posted by HOTBOY9002 View Post
आज तक ऐसी कहानी नहीं पढ़ी चेतन भगत वगैरह कुछ नहीं हैं तुम्हारे सामने
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Originally Posted by Pakslove View Post
One of the best story of xossip
best running story
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Originally Posted by frend2001 View Post
भाई बहुत खूब

Erotic सिर्फ sex का वर्णन करना नही है, सिचुएशन और कैरेक्टर devlop होना चाहिए और सबसे बड़ी बात की कहानी में flow होना चाहिये, जो इस कहानी में है

ये कहानी अगर इसी तरह चलती रही तो जल्द ही xossip की चुनिंदा कहानियो में इसका शुमार होगा

ये कहानी sex story नही काम साहित्य है।

लगे रहो भाई
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Originally Posted by Jiddiboy 1987 View Post
Bhai shandaar update.. Or kya likhu aapki tarif mein... Kya conversation likha hai bhai.. Aisa narration to film ka script writer b nhi likh skta.. Really lajawaab...
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Originally Posted by Jiddiboy 1987 View Post
Bhai kisi movie ke liye story likh ke dekho cha jaoge bhai.. I am serious bro..
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Originally Posted by ray001 View Post
nice update
is site pr mera 2 comment h ye..apki sbhi story padhi h Mene sbhi ek se badkar ek h..pr apki ending sad rhti h jo mjhe khud 5,6 din tk sad rkhti h to is br thodi kripa karna bhai..
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Originally Posted by Royal Lover View Post
Sabse bdi bat hoti hai story me flow.....kisi bhi angle se knhi se bhi...ye kahani kamjor nhi pd rhi hai.....har drishya ko bakhoobi darshaya hai.....mai tareef bhi kitni karu.....is kahani se lagta hai,..ki ap bhi....ek kamal ke lekhak ho
ishq hi to sabkuch hota hai....usi ka nateeja tha jo Kundan ne ...angaar ka kam tamam kar diya....
fauji bhai ek req hai,..ki is kahni ke khatm hone tak Ban mat hona...
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Originally Posted by neha sexy View Post
दिल करता है हाथ चूम लू इस कहानी को लिखने वाले के......
Superb update dear
Post more as soon as
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Originally Posted by Royal Lover View Post
for the story...mai har bar yhi bolta hu....this is a masterpiece
har character ka....narration...situation ke hisab se kiya hai....na koi bhaga daudi na hi kisi bhi scene me jaldbaji.......kahani ke har sacene me ek thahrav hai aur har thahrav me ...ka apna alag mja hai....
Kundan...do nav par savari karega...ye to tay lag rha hai....par dil ka rishta to ek ke sath hi judega......Aur rhi bat Bhabhi ke sath uske to kahne hi ky...keep it on Halfbludprince:repps: with

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Originally Posted by Pakslove View Post
Really a masterpiece
excellent writing
first time xossip pe koi story aisi mili Jo bar bar log in karne pe majboor kr deti hai
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Originally Posted by sunoanuj View Post
Ye story ek dum really story hai ...isko padhte hue usi jagah par pahunch jaate hai jiska varnan chal raha hota hai ... Bahut hee badhiya likhte ho ....

Awesome ...

Waiting for update...

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Originally Posted by jonny khan View Post
नाइस अपडेट

हर अपडेट दिल को छू जाता है
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Originally Posted by kuldeep2595 View Post
Excellent update bhai... .
Aapke har update ke suspense toh dimag ki batti gul kar dete hain, ab ye kiski tasveer hai jo bhabhi ki saheli ke ghar me hai.. ..
Bhabhi aur kundan ke beech ki najdikiya kaphi badh gayi hai...
Keep rocking.. ..
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Originally Posted by Angel Swati View Post

Me adult story pe cmnt ni karti hu, par tumhari kahani ne cmnt karne par majbur kar diya..
Mujhe jyada kuch likhna nahi aata, thoda bahut chhap rahi hu
Ab apki kahani ke jaisi kahani sayad hi padne ko milti hai,
Isme jism ki chahat ke bajay pyar ko dikhaya gaya hai, jo mujhe bahut acha laga..
Har ek update ke bad intjar rahta hai dusre update ka, ye kalaa apko
mahan writer,s ki list me Jodti hai,
Me nahi janti sab ko kya pasand hai, but i like ur writing stories,
Aasha karti hu ap uhi sbko entertain karate rahenge,


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Originally Posted by Rajk3786 View Post
बहुत सारे राज छुपे हैं इस कहानी मे
भाई ग़ज़ब लिख रहे हो

अपडेट देते रहे भाई
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Originally Posted by kuldeep2595 View Post
Excellent update bhai.. ..
Kundan aur bhabhi ke beech pyar ko bahut hi acchi tarah se dikhaya aapne...
Ye kaun hai jo andhere me ja raha hai, har pal koi na koi raaz khul raha hai....
Bhai, aapki story itni zabardast hai ki man karta hai ki aapse puri story ek saath sun loon, great story....
Keep rocking....
Eagerly waiting for next update... .
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Originally Posted by jonny khan View Post
मेरे पास शब्द नही है जिससे मय आपकी तारीफ कर सकू

यह xossip की best स्टोरी है, हिला कर रख दिया है
कुन्दन को भी और मुझे भी..............
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Originally Posted by aawara parinda View Post
Kundan Thakur, Bhabi ne to teri le li.
Kya kya saha hai in aurto ne Thakuro k julmo sitam.
Ab kya karega Kundan. Kya us mai itni himmat hai ki wo apne bhai or pita se koi saval kr sake. Kya Kundan kuch puch sakta hai apne bhai se ki wo kin aurto pr julm kiya or q kiya.
Kya Kundan Rana ji k samne khada ho kr kahega ki aap ne jo kiya wo sahi nahi tha.
Kya Rana ji apne Bahu k sath bhi so chuke hai.


Us rahasyamay Thakurain k anusar Kundan k bahan k bare mai kaha to lagta hai Kundan k bahan k sath bhi kuch achha nahi hua hai.
Padmini abhi bhi rahasya hai.

Ek rahasya sulajhta nahi balki use suljhane k chakkar mai duss saval or khade ho jate hai.

Ab agar Update ki baat karu to lajabab tha. Bole to rappp chikkk.
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Originally Posted by psmurvey View Post
your are the most prolific writer I have read on Xossip.. Superb.. hats off..and Thank you..
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Originally Posted by Gurugulabkhatri View Post
bhai jabardast update kuch panno ki ek ek line suna ke aage liye chod diya sahi hai lagta hai aane wale kuch update or bhi dhamakedar hone wale hai
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Originally Posted by Jiddiboy 1987 View Post
Bhai ye kya dhamaka kr diya... Kundan ke saath saath hm bhi sunn ho gaye... Yaha to rana ne jassi ko bhi nahi choda.. Sbkuch hila diya bhai aapne aisa to socha hi nhi tha... Ab to bhabhi hi bta degi or bache hue raaz.... Bhai ab wait nhi hota agla update de do plz...
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woww.....Sab much janna hai ....hamain.....an kahani ko ISSI track pe me chalo.....but...in an aggressive mode

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Originally Posted by Starlord69 View Post
sir AAP ki stories pahdi main awosm hai par ek baat samahj NAHI AYI jab bhabhi ne sab bata Diya to AAP ko BHI bata Dena tha Kyo Janna chate ho ye sab ye time hai Pooja ke bare me batane ka bhabhi ko

Baki aisa lagta hai koi lagav SA ho gaya hai is storie se har chiz hai is me emotion drama trazdi love revenge thrill and all
Maine Abhi rezistar kiya hai ISS site me bas AAP ki storie ke chalte

taki main BHI bata saku kaisa feel HOTA hai AAP ki storie pahd ke

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Originally Posted by psmurvey View Post
what a wonderful plot.. superb turn.. it will show true colour of respect, love, lust and honour,, most entertaining..

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Originally Posted by game888 View Post
Zabardast update bro, har update mein aik na aik dhamaka toh zaroor hora hai bhai.
Youraj singh ne toh six balls par six sixes mare teh, aap toh her update mein sixes he sixes lagarahe ho.
Full too enjoyment hora... .. .

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Originally Posted by duttluka View Post
this is turning into an epic!!!!!!

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Originally Posted by WildBoyXDK View Post
ab tak ke sare updates padh liye, kya likhni hai apki aisa lagta hai jaise ye kahani nahi koi sacchi ghatna hai.
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Originally Posted by Gurugulabkhatri View Post
bhai tumhari stor padhte padhte mera man nahi karta ki main apni stro ko aage badhauu

pata hai kyon



kyonki tumhari story padhte padhte mujhe apni story fiki lagne lag jati hai pata nahi kyon
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Originally Posted by Bigda shehzada View Post
kya mst story h bhai. aaj tk maine ese stiry kbi nai odi. life. m.

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Ab to kuch bolna or soch soch kr dimag ki dahi krna hi bekar..Sala main bhul gya tha k kiski story padh rha hu..hamesha ki tarah unexpected hogi ending joki ending hoti nhi hai..Raaz bhi saare tabhi khulenge as always..Apki story me Jo dikhta hai wo hota nhi hai..Sala end me kand to koi or hi kr rha hota hai... All I know that you are a great writer. Aisi story apse behtar koi nhi likh skta..Hat's off brother..Just waiting for your update

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Bhai g kya mast likh the ho
Waaa kya thakuro ke rob h
Aur bhabhi ke saat ka relationship bi bahut
Hi achi trah se h & emotions ko bi acha explanation do gye h
Keep writing like this
And i want more update bcz only one update is not enough
So I wish u understand our reader feeling
Readers want to many update of a superhit story
BTW thank for entertaining us from a fantastic story

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First of all lemme tell u I barely read 3-4 incest stories in my life and mujhe unmein se koi passand nahi aai reasons khud mujhe bhi nahi pata..so Maine incest stories padhni bandh kardi but I read this story because u wrote it.
Hindi font Hindi fonts mein likhna ek mushqill kaam hai or uppar se iss flow k sath Hindi fonts mein likhna u nailed it bru .Maine ye story aaj subah suru ki and abtak main 27updates padh chuka hun and aage nahi jaa paungaa uske liye maafi caahunga or woh bhi mera fault hai not yours.kyunki fir incest aaing jisase mera reading kaa flow kharaab hojaaega or story se interest challa jaaega.

Coming to the story ,tumhaare skills bahot he laajwaab hain just superb or uppar se command over language bhi bahot he umddaa hai kull millake ek must read story for readers jahaan tak Maine padhi wahaan tak mujhe kahin bhi koi galati najar nahi aai Jo bahot he achi baat hai or main bahot kam +I've reviews deta hun ye baat ju bhi jaante ho overall superb story superb start or bich -2 mein Jo desi tadka lagta haina woh toh superb he hai kahin bhi story kaa flow nahi bigada kahin bhi tumne focus nahi khoya kahin par bhi tum plot se nahi bhatke harr jagah ju ne plot ko bahot ache se maintain kiya hai Jo apne aap mein ek bahot badi baat hai main isme kahin bhi bore nahi hua kahin ye ni laga ki "yahaan jyada hogaya yaa wahaan thoda kam"
Highlight part hai is story mein bhabhi k satha conversation sachmein bhai ekdum realistic conversation show ki hai tumne harr jagah par...jyada nahi bus itana he kehna caahunga bru...

Overall a Awesome story by an awesome person..

Hatsoff to your skills .
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शानदार अपडेट..दिल करता है कि अपडेट खत्म ही ना हो, और बस पढ़ते ही जाए.. ये दिल माँगे मोर ।
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Bhai kya likhu aapki prasansa me mere pass sabd hi nai hai
Aapne jiss khubsurti se jindgi k har ek pahlu ko ujagar kiya hai mai sab ka toh nai par apni jarur kahunga mere bas se bahar ki chij hai..
Aapke andaj ka toh mai deewana ho gaya bhai


Kya likha hai aapne kasam se iss se achi story iss site par mujhe aaj tak nai milli..

Bahut hi besabri se aglle update ka intjar hai mitr

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Bhai kahan se late hi aise twists update khatam hote hi aik pyas si jag Kati hai agle update ki.

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itni jabardat story hai yeh ki daily update check karne ke liye online aana padta hai ..
or rishton or bhawnaon ka itna jabrdust smavesh hai ki, sirf yahi kaha jaa sakta isse behtar is story ko nahi likha jaa sakta,,,,,,,,,,,
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Great work.. Veer.. I must say u have... Wonderful writing skill...i am reading your story from last 2 weeks.. Or i can say im following.. Waiting for your update.. God bless u.. Jai hind...
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ek shandar story jise padhne par lagta hai koi film chal rahi hai. aap kalm ke jadugar ho. thanks,

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shocking update story mein ekaek turn dena ho to sabko apko dekhana chahiye .jabrdast suspense jo story mein utsukta bana ke rakhta hai. update to auro ke mukbile jaldi de rhe ho hame hi der lagti hai, kya kare story hi aisi hai thanks,

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Dost supence bhot hai aapki story mai
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Super story he.
Real suspense kiya hota he is story se pata chala.

Kundan ko Pooja ki payal mili hogi
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Sir ji is update ko padhne ke bad kuchh nahi kahna h mujhe .
Aapke updateo ko padhne ke bad lgta h ki mere pas dimag me bhusa bhra h .
Bssss aage ka intjar
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Sir jii bahut badhia update .
Koi jwab nahi aapka .
Kitne suspense rakhoge sir jii .
Suspense pe suspense mil rahe h sir pr answer nahi mil rahe h .
Aage ka intjar

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best update , is wakt yah story xossip ki sabse interested serial novel hai. story likhne ki jo rochak bhasha shaily aapki hai wah aur writers mein nahi milti sexy language ke bad bhi story ko padhne ki ichchha bani rahti hai. aapse ek request hai ki is story ko jaldi khatm mat karna jitna badha sako badhte jao.

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congrats for 500 pages...............and mind blowing..............make a Hollywood movie........
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आज तक की बेस्ट स्टोरी है जो मैंने अपनी लाइफ मे पढ़ी है ।लेकिन इतना बेदर्द लेखक नही देखा जिसे अपने रीडर की फिकर ही नही है ।यार बस अव एक अपडेट से कम नही चले गा। यार रत की नींद नही आये गई। प्लीज एक उपडेट देदो।।।।।

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Superb updates dost
Aisi story na aaj tak padhi aur nahi shayad kabhi padh pau
Waiting for next
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सभी अपने-2 तरीके से अनुमान लगा रहें है..गुत्थीयों को सुलझाने में, देखते है किसका तीर निशाने पर लगता है।
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story bahut hi shandar chal rahi hai .sir mujhe to lagata hai ki suspense ke maharathi devki nandan khatri ki aap barabari karna chahte ho. story ki rochakta aisi bani hui hai ki pathak ise chhod kar bhag hi nahi sakta . aapki is khoobi keliye aapko pranam hai.
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Itne sare update aaye par esa ek bhi update nahi jis me suspense na ho....
Great suspenseful story...
Suspense ke mamle me is se achi story ho hi nahi sakti...
Thanks for writing this...

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Thanks for updating again

when people start giving different opinions/advice and suggestion to a story, it means story is too good and they are very involved in it so never mind about critical comments keep writing in ur own way

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