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Prince bai story bahut aa att aa yr eh repeat krn di lod ni...

but jehda oh ramu nu bahr kaddeya under pressure n plot change krleya... oh as a writer sahi ni laggaa...

you r the master of your thread... u started wid a stroyline in ur mind... why stepping away from it now just coz few peoples fantasies are different??


haan oh ramu da je kuch zyada ho janda jiwe kyi jgah te bihari jatti randi malik wala scene bna dinde writers oh galat aa... bt otherwise ta chaecter sahi c... n plz dont limit the story within the family only... go wid your own plot and show us something new u got... family stories already bahut aa... you came wid a uniqueness but now going into same old plot as everyone been into.

dont restrict yourself with others opinion veere... let them give their opinion... u r not bound to obey each n evryone of them... u r not getting paid by them or even by me. chahe jinna marzi asi ideas de jaiyiye bt reality eh aa k most of us ne story odo hi padhni aa jdo free time hoya... koi nhi eho jeha jehda k story te exclusive aun lagg jauga sirff eslyi k es writer ne mere kahe te plot change krleya yrr...

hai na?! so plz b urself yr n write whatever u want to write... haan kuch dialogues ya scenes nu elaborate wrge suggestion mannane chahide aa oh jaayz aa.. bt pura plot na chnge kro sir...


rabb khush rkhe tuhanu n hope ek eho jehi story daoge tusi jehdi pehla kise ne na ditti howe.
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Prince bai story bahut aa att aa yr eh repeat krn di lod ni...

but jehda oh ramu nu bahr kaddeya under pressure n plot change krleya... oh as a writer sahi ni laggaa...

you r the master of your thread... u started wid a stroyline in ur mind... why stepping away from it now just coz few peoples fantasies are different??


haan oh ramu da je kuch zyada ho janda jiwe kyi jgah te bihari jatti randi malik wala scene bna dinde writers oh galat aa... bt otherwise ta chaecter sahi c... n plz dont limit the story within the family only... go wid your own plot and show us something new u got... family stories already bahut aa... you came wid a uniqueness but now going into same old plot as everyone been into.

dont restrict yourself with others opinion veere... let them give their opinion... u r not bound to obey each n evryone of them... u r not getting paid by them or even by me. chahe jinna marzi asi ideas de jaiyiye bt reality eh aa k most of us ne story odo hi padhni aa jdo free time hoya... koi nhi eho jeha jehda k story te exclusive aun lagg jauga sirff eslyi k es writer ne mere kahe te plot change krleya yrr...

hai na?! so plz b urself yr n write whatever u want to write... haan kuch dialogues ya scenes nu elaborate wrge suggestion mannane chahide aa oh jaayz aa.. bt pura plot na chnge kro sir...


rabb khush rkhe tuhanu n hope ek eho jehi story daoge tusi jehdi pehla kise ne na ditti howe.
pehla ta thanwaad veer story padn li
veer hun ta raamu nu kad dita hai main lekin shaid oh future vich o wapis awe.
lekin eh story main family base rkhna chahunda a.
jiwe bhen te pra di chal rhi h story 18 saal di umar to fr vyah te age v main inu leke jana chauna.
j nav da charactee build hoeya ove hor character build krne ne te age jake family to bahar v story howege.
main kise de pressure under nahi ha tension na le tu veer. bas story enjoy kr te reply krda reh.
waise eh story aje bahut lambi chalegi
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c-raa updatee...

vdia plos reha ghodi nu..

lgda swaaari jldi o kru hun ehdii..

bki dkhde aa kini cheti kabu aaundi aa eh ghodii..

bki wich wich nav de scene v add kri jayeoo.. if u comfrtablee

keep goin 22
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hun ta wait kdi tanga kho k paindi suprina

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n apart from plot and storyline... kuch suggestions aa jo shayd tuhanu different laggn n je match kre tuhadi thoughts nal ta consider zrur kriyo...
n by d way depend es gall te krda that u want to show all elements of ur writing or wanna stick to a typical sex story plot only...

jiwe harman n main character di dosti... osnu thoda lift kita ja skda jidda story di beggining ch c... specially oh 75 percnt wale scene te thoda drama jeha create kita ja skda c...

ramu nu hje v as a external character wang rkhya ja skda jo main character nal milke pind ch shikaar kre ya karnaame dikhaawe apne...

and raman, suprina krke ekdum sideline hogyi wichari, gurleen ekdum gayb hogyi, harman de v kuch adventure paa lao...


i mean chacters na wdhn... par sabda kuch na scene agge wadhda rahe... jiwe rishteya di chhaanv rahi 21yrr pehle wale plot ch...


eh sab bas suggestions ne... final choice tuhadi aa... bt i hv seen ur writing skills are very good n u can be of some of those writers who have ablity to cover all the elements in a single story itself.

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pehla ta thanwaad veer story padn li
veer hun ta raamu nu kad dita hai main lekin shaid oh future vich o wapis awe.
lekin eh story main family base rkhna chahunda a.
jiwe bhen te pra di chal rhi h story 18 saal di umar to fr vyah te age v main inu leke jana chauna.
j nav da charactee build hoeya ove hor character build krne ne te age jake family to bahar v story howege.
main kise de pressure under nahi ha tension na le tu veer. bas story enjoy kr te reply krda reh.
waise eh story aje bahut lambi chalegi
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pehla ta thanwaad veer story padn li
veer hun ta raamu nu kad dita hai main lekin shaid oh future vich o wapis awe.
lekin eh story main family base rkhna chahunda a.
jiwe bhen te pra di chal rhi h story 18 saal di umar to fr vyah te age v main inu leke jana chauna.
j nav da charactee build hoeya ove hor character build krne ne te age jake family to bahar v story howege.
main kise de pressure under nahi ha tension na le tu veer. bas story enjoy kr te reply krda reh.
waise eh story aje bahut lambi chalegi
shi keha veerr..

jive sochya owe likhoo

kyn k j koi kehnda k eda likho ohda likhoo.. oh likhya sirf ohnu psnd aau bakiyn nu nii..

jo as a writr tuc sochoge y likhoge oh hrek nu psnd aaugaa...

write as u think....

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