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Review on The Diary of an innocent Girl

Beginning of the Story was gud.well narrated ,Description of incidents very well, short, completed n cut to cut .....No extra spicy n drama

Initially , when i start reading it's like gud further reading would give a view like too much X factors written But Aftr readin' the end of the story ....Felt that's necessary one !!

selection of plot is gud, as always flattery dialogues :* few dialogues were impressive one, all dialogue, independent, free fly of Green..... after read it, feeling refresh.

Overall Very Gud story .....Gud Luck... all the best.
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Review - The diary of an innocent girl By Nainster

Ek zabardast kahani naina babu ki taraf se...waaqayi naina ne jo shabd is kahani mein daale hai oose byaan karna muskil hai...itne safaai se aisa lag raha tha jaise hollywood ki translted koi hindi novel parh raha hoo...ek sadistic horny girl ; jiske andar sex tut kut ke bhara hua hai...par sabkuch marji se just like my life my choice ;

dheere dheere story thrill huyi investigation officer mukund ooska byaanat le raha hai...oose nangi kar rakha hai oose koi humiliation nahi koi darr nahi she became a victim of a conspiracy which later revealed she is the architect of that conspiracy which she built up so brilliantly wow

fhir kahani mein bina saboot ke oose riha kar diya jata hai..ooski life sexperience ko janne ke baad aisa laga jaise oose career chahiye tha aur oosne ise apna pesha nahi balki ek passion bana liya

green ka character bahut hi zabardast sadistic hai jo apni marzi ke liye kucch bhi kar sakti hai....lekin ksii ki zabardasti ooske marzi ke khilaaf kattayi nahi chah sakti

ending superb hai ki mukund chutiya ban gaya aur wohh chahke bhi aisi ladki se jeet na paaya...oosne bata bhi diya ki wohi qatil hai lekin hath dhare ke dhare reh gaye ooske

naina u just written a mind blowing story and it's damn gud luck
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The Diary Of a Innocent Girl by Nain11ster


speechless Mere in teen word ne story ki kabiliyat define kar di ...Nain ..you r a best writer on this forum..ye kahne ki jarurat nhi hai ....
aur nam ke hisab se hi story likhi hai ...

Pta hai nain maine kya socha tha ...ki jab aapki story aayegi na ...to usme ek ek kami ko chun chun kar nikalunga ...par jab maine story pdi ...uske bad mai kuch der yun hi baitha rha ....mai bas yahi soch rha tha ki iske bare me kya rewiew dun .........jaise jaise story bad rhi thi ...vaise vaise mera interest bhi bad rha tha ...par jnha se aapne ye murder mystery solve vala kissa dala na to aisa lga jaise kisi ne AC coach se utarkar General Dibbe me baitha diya ho ....uske baad maine story skip kar di ..puri skip nhi ki ,par ek sarsari nazar se pdi Phir vo interst nhi rha jo aapne suru me bnaya tha ...ek aisi ladki ki kahani jo free minded hai ..azad khyalo vali hai ...koi use touch kare to use koi problem nhi hoti par usme uski marji honi chahiye .....Par use bura tab lagta hai jab koi uske sath jabardasti kare ... ...aur agar use bura lagta hai to jan se mar bhi deti hai ..mujhe bas itna hi samajh me aaya story me..aur jo bat samajh nhi aayi ...aur ab agar jyada deep me jaunga to apke fans galiyan sunayege

Ho sakta hai kai logo ko mera rewiew kharab lage ...par maine jo feel kiya vo likha hai ....ynha apka plot bhi unique hai ...simple narration ..jo kahani ko aur bhi damdar bnata hai ...par maine apki story se jitni umeed ki thi usse kam mila ...

NOTE:- Nainu uncile bura mat manna ..maine apke writting style ya narration ki buaryi nhi ki ...aapki mehnat story me puri dikh rhi hai ...ye mera personal opinion hai ki mujhe crime vala part bilkul bhi pasand nhi aaya
Story Rated :- 7/10
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Review - The diary of an innocent girl
Ab tak apki kayi saari stories padhi par kisi me bhi samaanta (reputation) nahi tha . har story ka apna alag he andaj tha , har baar alag scene, alag plot . Yaar kaha se laate ho itne khatarnak ideas.
jab story ka title padha tab laga ke koi maasum ladki he jiski koi aapbiti he par jab puri story read ki tab socha ki ladki maasum he to he , jiske khud ke rules he , jise duniya ki koi parva nahi , jise kisi ke touch karne pe aitraaz nahi he par bina uski permission ke touch karne se aitraaz he, jo maza liya maza diya isi policy pe chalti he. kisi se kuch bhi expect nhi karti.
jo janti he ke saamne vali hawsi ko uske plans me nahi usme interest he . jise khud ko uski bina marzi ke kisi ke sath sona pasand nhi.
Koi taqat ka ya pese ka jorr uspe dikhaye ye bhi use pasand nhi he. aur koi usse jabardasti kare ye wo bardasht nahi kar sakti .

Jab apki story post hui usi ke kuch minutes baad mene read ki thi socha tha ke story read karke sidha review dunga par jab puri story read ki tab kuch bhi likhate nahi bana . sara din yahi sochne me gaya ke wo sahi he ya galat.
Last me ek he decision pe pohocha ke use sahi galat theherane wala me kaun hu? Na judge ? na police? na CBI ? fir use sahi ya galat kehne ka adhikaar muze kisne diya?

Fir ek purana dialogue yaad aya ke kisi ko sahi galat theherane se pehle uski jagah khud ko rakh ke dekho . uski condition ka andaja lagao.
Bas jab mene socha ke me ek ladka hu .apni choice se jeeta hu ,meri personal life me koi dakhal de ye muze khattai pasand nahi . me apni marzi se jise chahe apna partner choose karta hu . koi muze bina meri marzi ke playbooki tarah ismaal nahi kar sakta.
To yahi sab baate mene uske baare me bhi sochi ke ha jese me khud apne liye independent hu vesi vo bhi he.
last me itna kahunga ke Nain sir ne bahot acche se ek free minded ladki feelings ko dikhaya he.
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The Diary Of a Innocent Girl by Nain11ster


starting bahut achi hai...ek ladki apne arman...apna aZadi ke liye kya kuch nahi kiya hai....

aaj ki ladki ke liye...ye ek story morality hai....

bale hi us story me prostitute dikay hai...

lekin har ladki yehi kare ye to nahi dikaya hai....

har ladki ke andher kuch na kuch adhure araman rahte hai....

duniya ke log chand pe pahunch gaye hai lekin gaon ke ladki aaj bi apne azadi ke liye lad rahi hai....


bas un morali support chahiye hai....

green ke charchter is fabulous .....

apne marji ke bina kuch bi nahi karti.....

lekin kya khoon karna ....right dicison...no it completely worng....

saza to dena tha lekin murder is not right .....


bas last me murder scene toda atapat lagi hai.. ..

sab badiya hai......

aapki writing style ki kitni bi tarif karu utan kaam hai....

8/10.....

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Apki story ke bare mein kya kahu samajh nahi aata .... One of the best story on family love ....


ek baap aur beti ke pyar ko apne bahut ache se darsaya hai ....


Story bahut sad thi aur iska ending bahut hi sad tha ...
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Apki story ke bare mein kya kahu samajh nahi aata .... One of the best story on family love ....


ek baap aur beti ke pyar ko apne bahut ache se darsaya hai ....


Story bahut sad thi aur iska ending bahut hi sad tha ...
Thanx zopion bro....mujhe nahi pata ye kahani mere dil dimag mai kaha se aayi....lekin jo bhi aayi jaisi bhi aayi mai likhta chala gaya....ab dekhna ye hai ke ise or bhi koi pasand karta hai ya nahi....

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Freedom......

Officially 1947 in India..

Lekin sayad mardo ke liya hoga .. Kyu ki aaj bhi kahi na kahi Ladies ke liye ye sirf ek word h ...kahi samaj me ladkiyo ko freedom nahi h to kahi logo ki nazar me ...
Kuch log.ke to dil bhi itne kale hote h ki unke dil me bhi ladkiyo ke liye bhi freedom nhi h...
Jab hum apne Marji se kuch bhi kar sakte h to ..ye haq hame kisne diya h ki hum kisi aur ke freedom per ungli uthaye....
Nain bhai aapki story 21st century ka ek mirror ki tarah h ...
Very heart touching bro....

I am not good in feeling experssion...

Bus yahi kahunga..

Freedom is not for Gender ....

Everyone deserves freedoms

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Dewpawali. . By. Vijay
Very emotional and heart touching bhau. . . . . . . . Bhut hi shandar dialouges. . The bt ending sad hua. . . . . . . . Pehli baar xp pe real baap or beti ka pyaar dekh b incest ki jgh. . . . . Bhut hi acha. . . . . 9/10

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Dewpawali. . By. Vijay
Very emotional and heart touching bhau. . . . . . . . Bhut hi shandar dialouges. . The bt ending sad hua. . . . . . . . Pehli baar xp pe real baap or beti ka pyaar dekh b incest ki jgh. . . . . Bhut hi acha. . . . . 9/10
Thank you very much for your review and high rating...mujhe nahi pata pahle bhi kisi ne is tarah ki story likhi hai ya nahi...mene bas ek koshish kari hai agar aap sabhi readers ka saath milega to ye koshish kaamyab jarur hogi...thanx once again

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